an attempt at a new style of poetry.
bleed me blue
opium bleeds me blue
so blue.
did you feel
it’s raining snowy splinters of glass?
this has shaken us so hard
so hard.
aglow
the little veins are aglow
and the markings left
prickle and shine.
opium bleeds me blue
so blue,
in the flickering lamplight
i see you, so blue.
did you know
the winter snow is on us
now.
touch, your fiery touch
so like the blazinghotwhitescauldingbreath
instantaneous repercussions.
aglow
i am aglow
i see the splinters left
by shattered sun shards.
bleed me, bleed me
blue
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I really, really liked this. I think it flowed really well. It seems like something that someone would read in a jam poetry session. It's great, good job.
The new style works- it flows nicely and was intriguing as well. Nice job.
Ooh opium....
Yeah um. Actually I really like the way it flowed. At first i thought it wouldn't flow properly, just be one of those poems you read aloud slowly but dramatically and everyone goes "Man, that's deep." But it actually goes quite well. Good imagery, good use of words, cool layout.
I like this, its different. I think it should be under alternative poetry.
Very simple, but is full of imagery. I like the repitition.